As an example of how badly prose can fall into mindless repetition, here's a passage from Cycle of Nemesis, by Kenneth Bulmer (Ace Books, 1967). This could have been avoided....
Saturday, December 12, 2015
Miserable Spectacle
When people send me early drafts to criticize, I always recommend revising
aloud. The ear can pick up awkward patterns often concealed from the
eye, like the EEs of too many adverbs, or the monotonously-chiming INGs
of present participles used in place of the simple past tense.
As an example of how badly prose can fall into mindless repetition, here's a passage from Cycle of Nemesis, by Kenneth Bulmer (Ace Books, 1967). This could have been avoided....
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As an example of how badly prose can fall into mindless repetition, here's a passage from Cycle of Nemesis, by Kenneth Bulmer (Ace Books, 1967). This could have been avoided....
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